Loyalty
has a big impact on our relationships and the way we act, however,
will being loyal always bring success? Although there are many
benefits to loyalty, the negative components should also be
considered.
Being
loyal has many positive effects on ourselves and our relationships
with others. It shows commitment and reliability, which are big
factors of relationships in any situation such as a job or social
setting. Commitment shows your interest and devotion towards
something, such as a job, and can lead to success. People who are
more committed to something tend to do better in the long-run, like
putting effort into practicing playing a sport or instrument.
Reliability also shows devotion. Having someone to rely on means you
have support whenever you need it, in any situation you're going
through. These factors of loyalty can help us build and keep strong
relationships.
Although
loyalty can be a good thing, too much can change the way you and
others see yourself. Being too loyalty causes you to focus and base
all your thoughts onto one thing. This will allow people to take
advantage of you, resulting in bias opinions and missed
opportunities. When you are loyalty to someone of something, people
can see this as a way to shift your views to what they believe is
right. For example, being loyal to a certain brand of shoes can cause
you to think that other brands pale in comparison. This extreme
loyalty changes the way you see other things, changing your personal
opinions and no longer allowing you to think for yourself. As well,
these different opinions take away opportunities you may have
previously enjoyed. The best way to avoid all of this is to stay
loyal to what you believe is right, rather than allowing your ideas
to falter for others.
Trust
is a big factor in loyalty. Being trustworthy and dependable plays an
important role in how people see and feel about you, however, are
there also negatives in being trustworthy? Though trust is the only
way people will feel comfortable with opening up to you, sometimes
the expectation of being trustworthy is hard to live up to. Making
an error, such as lying about where you are or telling a secret, can
change a person's view on you in an instant. People will usually
focus on the bad things, whether they're big or small, to outweigh
the good you have done for them. Sharing a secret, for example, may
seem like it's not a big deal, however when someone has such a high
standard for their trust, a small mistake can be a big, lit-up
billboard.
Trust
is a wonderful thing, but it is important to make sure you can handle
both the responsibility of having trust and the consequences of
breaking it.
Though
loyalty is a big factor in out relationships with others, we must
remember that being loyal to ourselves is just as important, and
having a balance between our personal and social loyalty is the best
way to benefit from it.
I really liked your essay Alex. I liked how you not only focussed on loyalty itself, but other specific aspects that come with loyalty, such as trust. That focus on specific parts of the topic made it easier to get an in-depth understanding of your beliefs on the subject. I also really liked your metaphor that compared small mistakes to a lit-up billboard.
ReplyDeleteSomething that I might suggest is to spend more time on your conclusion paragraph. I felt that you maybe should have summarized your points to give the reader a more overall glance at your argument. Also, I think that you should have possibly used a hook to end the essay off.
That being said, I really liked the way that you spoke about the outcomes of loyalty and the different ways that being loyal could end in. Great job!
Alex, I thought your introduction was good but it was short and could be expanded. Although, I thought you had great topics and I totally agree with you. I thought you explained them very well. Lastly, your conclusion. Your conclusion wasn't very long but I don't think it needed to be. I thought you did a good job of concluding everything in one sentence. It was short, simple and to the point.
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